Free
Hugs for every one
In
the video we can see a man who doing a campaign about share the happiness with
hugs. he was walking in the downtown while holds sign " free hugs".
The first when he wanted to show the action, a lot of people who just smile and
move away when he greet, but him never give up. And then the situation was
changed when an old women come to him and then him asked to get a hugs from
him. the man gladly accept and gave her a hug. the situation was changed after
that there are many people saw that and some people wanted get a hugs from the
man too. every person who passes are always asked to hugged him like young man,
women, old, and kids wanted to get a free hugs from the man.
Because
a lot of people there and the campaign that conducted by the man was banned by
the police. The man tried to explain what was the purpose of the event. After
that, the police allowed him to continued his event. so many people to do the
same and finally the man give a signature list to the people who wanted to get
a free hug and supported this event. Every one who supported this event will
give a signature and finally 10 thousand signature from people was reached. After
that the police permit the man to continue his campaign and it's awesome when
every people can share a hugs and happiness. This video have a lot of moral,
this video can tell us how important respect and share a happiness.
i think u should pay attention on your paragraph.
ReplyDeletebetter to use 'tab' in beggining of the paragraph so the reader will not become confuse.
gud :D
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ReplyDeleteHello, It's me Griwanasta
ReplyDeleteI think you should pay more attention about your grammar and vocabulary selection
the tenses also quite a mess and i really suggest you to edit it ASAP
the contents are also not so deep yet
I think you need to watch once more and re-do the writing
I also recommend you to change the phrase "In the video" and to carefully select your Topic sentence along with it's supporting sentences
sorry for my impolite advice, thanks and best regards >_<